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Post by Nunnally Lamperouge on Mar 2, 2013 0:23:07 GMT -5
THE BASICS --{Name}-- Nunally vi Britannia
--{Alias}-- Nunally Lamperouge
--{Age}-- Fourteen
--{Gender}-- Female
--{Race/Nationality}-- Britannia
--{Occupation/Rank}-- Princess/Student
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APPEARANCE & BEHAVIOR --{Physical Description}-- She has violet eyes and sandy brown hair. She wears comfortable clothes mostly a dress and shoes that she usually wears. She is always in her wheelchair in the mornings to the evenings. She wears a butterfly necklace that is a choker. She paralyzed from the waist down. Her hair is curly and she keeps it straight down since she wouldn't let it be put up. She is at the height of five foot and three inches tall and weighs just slightly at one hundred and ten lbs. She has a blindness disability that makes it harder for her to live one day through the next.
She just gets into clothes that are mostly easier. She loves clothes that she can simply easier get into without getting through a whole fuss. She's frustrated that she can't see at all that makes her living at the school a bit harder, since she had been going through her entire fourteen years of life trying to figure out about her own eyes, and why was the fact she couldn't see out of them. She had believed that her blindness was due to the trauma of the shock of seeing her mother getting killed.
--{Personality}-- Nunally is a kindhearted girl who has a warm smile. She is patient and understanding individual who cares about people that she is friends with. When she was younger she had thrown tantrums to get her own way. Despite of her own difficulties in life she has a warm smile that could keep up with a kind smile. For the decisions that considered heavy-duty she could make the tough decisions. And yet for the greatest weakness to her is her kind heart and her love for her brother Lelouch Lamperouge. She is even gentle sister that wants the best for her brother.
She is an innocent girl who just loves animals. She enjoys their company especially Arthur who had made quite a fuss when he had first came. She had complicated feelings about Britannia and her father for that most. She loved Britannia but at the same time she had wanted them to see Japanese people as Japanese people. For her dysfunctional family it still works in all honesty. She cares about them in her own way.
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BATTLEFIELD EVALUATION --{Knightmare Frame}--
Name: N/A Model Number: {Optional}
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--{Weapons}-- N/A
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--{Special Skills/Abilities}-- She knows someone is lying just by touching their hand by her own limitations and high levels of empathy.
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PERSONAL INFO
--{Family}-- Lelouch Lamperouge- older brother Charles zi Britannia- father Marianne vi Britannia- mother V.V. (Uncle) --{Friends}-- Suzaku Kururugi Milly Ashford Kallen Kozuki Shirley Fenette Rivalz Cardemonde Nina Einstein --{Known Associates}-- Arthur Sayoko Shinozaki and etc
--{History}-- Nunally vi Britannia was born on October 25 in the year of 2003. She was born as a princess of the Britannian family. Her parents names are Charles zi Britannia and Marianne vi Britannia. She has one older brother by the name of Lelouch vi Britannia. When she was younger she had been shot in the legs and she had witnessed the death of her mother. Her father had used geass on her to make her believe that she was blind. Nunally had been going through a lot of surgeries for her legs then ended up in a wheelchair. She had spent some of her own time at the Kururugi household, this is where she had first met Suzaku. She had listened to her brother having fun with his new best friend, Suzaku. She didn't mind one bit since she had loved her brother and Suzaku as well.
She and her brother had been exiled to Japan that was now called Area 11. They had took on the last name of Lamperouge. She had been living at the Ashford Academy since it was easier for her due to her disabilities. She was an honorable member of the Student Council. Her maid that took care of her and her brother had been there for her while they had lived at the student dorm. For a long time that she could remember that she was able to tell someone was lying by touching their hand. She had believed that her brother wouldn't lied to her not ever. --{RP Sample}-- Nunally was in her and her brother's room of the student council building. She was waiting for her brother to come home while she was making origami she was listening to Sayoko. She had liked making origami, but she didn't have a clue of what her brother was doing. So, when he had gotten home, he had put her straight to bed. She had been waiting for her brother to tell her what he was doing, but she was patient woman who didn't wanted to pried into his own business. She was just woken up the next day, and she waited for her brother to put her in her wheelchair.
She had touched her friend from her childhood. She had admitted to herself that all truthfully that she had been surprised that Suzaku was actually there talking to her. She had remembered that Suzaku was one of the ones that knew that she was a princess of Britannia. She could tell it was Suzaku by the voice and the touch of his hand.
"Live the life you want to live. Be the person you want to remember. Make decisions, make mistakes. If you fail, at least you tried. Nunally said. She was just trying to make sure that her entire life she had lived her life to its fullest. She didn't want to want to think of herself as weak, and she had wanted to think for the best of the people who came in her life. Nunally had sat in her wheelchair when her brother and Suzaku had finally came to the ground.
I'm a member of the student council, so I would give you both a kiss." Nunally said, before she gave them a kiss.
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Post by Lelouch Lamperouge on Mar 3, 2013 1:57:46 GMT -5
--{Name}-- Check.
--{Alias}-- Check.
--{Age}-- Check.
--{Gender}-- Check.
--{Race/Nationality}-- Check.
--{Occupation/Rank}-- Check.
--{Physical Description}-- I’d like to see you go a bit more in-depth with her appearance. You definitely have a great basis for an effective appearance section here, but perhaps you could elaborate just a bit more, to stretch it out to closer to two paragraphs? Maybe talk about what sort of facial expression one would see her wear typically, or in various situations? What sort of dress does she wear? We know from the show that her dress differs significantly from the other female students at Ashford – is this due to her apparent disability, does she prefer these clothes, are they easier to put on? I’ll leave it up to you to make a decision as to the reasoning.
Also, just to nit-pick a bit. First, make sure you try to proofread your submissions, as the first line is missing the word “eyes” after violet. In addition to this, the following line (“She keeps her eyes closed as if she's blind.”) seems to suggest choice on the part of Nunnally. However, even if WE know, as of now, that it was more of a mental block than a physical one keeping her from seeing, at the beginning of the series it’s apparent that Nunnally can’t control her functions in the way that we see her do at the end of the series. I’d make it clear that she keeps her eyes closed because she CANNOT open them, and that for all intents and purposes she is, in fact, blind (if only for the time being).
--{Personality}-- I’d also love to see you elaborate a bit here. You spend quite a bit of time talking about her smile, and while it’s important to talk about the way she presents herself to other characters, it’s just as important to remember to reflect on what’s inside her head. Is Nunnally frustrated with her condition, or does she accept it as her lot in life, and try to make the best of it? What’s she like around certain types of people? Around animals? What are her thoughts on Britannia? Does she still care for her now-defunct relatives? These are all interesting questions you can answer here, and I know for a fact that picking Nunnally’s brain will be a worthwhile venture.
Going to pick on one line again, here. “For the decisions that considered heavy-duty she could be on the borderline of ruthless.” I feel as though this needs a qualifier. Perhaps you could use evidence from the show. Don’t present it as something that HAS happened (as we’re starting from the beginning of the show), but rather present it as evidence, OOC, to me so as to show exactly what you mean when you call her “ruthless”. Are you using the right word here? Is she ruthless, or willing to bear a heavy burden? Is this self-sacrificial in nature, or something she does to assert power where she can? Please, make this more clear to me, so I can feel justified in accepting it.
--{Knightmare Frame}--
Name: Check. Model Number: Check.
Height: Check. Weight: Check. Physical Description: Check.
Equipment: Check. Armaments: Check.
Notes: Check.
--{Weapons}-- Check.
--{Equipment}-- Check.
--{Special Skills/Abilities}-- I think this is an interesting thing to note, though I’d also like you to add that this isn’t necessarily a supernatural ability or gift of any sort, but rather due to an abnormal amount of sympathy/empathy on her part, combined with what seems to be an enhanced sense of touch, due to her other limitations.
--{Family}-- Check.
--{Friends}-- Check. However, are the members of the student council really “associates” and not “friends”?
--{Known Associates}-- You’ll have to remove C2 from this list, for now. Nunnally doesn’t meet C2 until…I believe it’s episode 5 of Lelouch of the Rebellion. You can add her once we reach that point, and Nunnally has actually had the chance to become associated with her.
--{History}-- Unfortuanately, I’m going to have to ask you to remove the last paragraph from this history. Because ROJ’s main plot begins in the year 2017, with the incident in Shinjuku, Nunnally has yet to meet Suzaku again, get kidnapped by V2, or have any of the events you listed happen to her. Try to stretch out the time she spent between being a princess and becoming Nunnally Lamperouge. You can talk about the way she felt, having to leave her home as a political hostage. You can talk about their time at the Kururugi Household (which you left out entirely). This is especially important, because this is where she first meets Suzaku, and as such qualifies him as a “friend”. Try to make this time period a bit longer when it comes to description. If you need any help, feel free to come to me, as I’ll be able to give you more ideas.
--{RP Sample}-- Try to proofread this a bit. You’ve got enough when it comes to length, but your narration seems to bounce around from one thing to another quite a bit. It may be less of a problem with narration, and more a matter of grammatical and syntactical errors. Feed it into Word, or a similar program, and run a spelling/grammar check. Then, read it back to yourself, and see if it sounds correct to you. If all else fails, ask one of us to help you; we’ll generally be glad to oblige if we have time. Once you make the sequence of events in this post a bit more clear, you’ll be golden.
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Overall, this is a great first attempt for a canon application. Nunnally’s a very hard character to come up with information and material for, so don’t feel discouraged that I asked you for more in parts. Just see it as a chance for you to expand upon Nunnally’s character with your own ideas, so long as they’re plausible. If you need any help, ask myself or Clovis, and I look forward to reviewing the revised version soon!
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Post by Nunnally Lamperouge on Mar 3, 2013 2:55:18 GMT -5
fixed
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Post by Lelouch Lamperouge on Mar 3, 2013 9:18:21 GMT -5
The only things I see right now is that no change has been made to her special abilities section, and your choice of the word "ruthless" is still too harsh.
As I said, it would be great if you could just add that her ability is due to her being an incredibly sympathetic/empathetic individual, as that's the REAL ability at work there.
In addition, all I need you to do in the personality section is to change the word "ruthless" to something more fitting. She's "willing to do what needs to be done", or "willing to sacrifice her own peace of mind to benefit others", or perhaps she even "understands that repugnant actions can be necessary in the overall scheme of things". "Ruthless" just doesn't suit Nunnally's character.
After that, I think you'll be good to go!
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Post by Lelouch Lamperouge on Mar 3, 2013 9:28:21 GMT -5
Ok, so since you told me in the chat that the changes were made I'm taking a look and....
Yeah, things look good to go here! Congratulations, you're officially approved, and can begin RPing whenever you'd like!
I look forward to seeing what you can do!
APPROVED
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